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She stumbled into the place by accident;
Covered in the dust of the road she'd been traveling,
And carrying half a ton of baggage she didn't need.

She threw what she had of value down,
And ordered a drink.

She got water.
It wasn't even very wet.

Over in one corner under a dim light some guy was spouting words;
Concocted self-justifying nonsense pretending to have deep meaning.
She waited for him to shut up and for the water to do its thing,
Then addressed them all:

“Foolish creatures of rigid habit,
Who think they can rise to the heavens,
By means of self-righteousness,
While committing every sin there ever was.

I'm the result of your sanctimonious banter,
Your prescribed rituals of feigned penance and remorse,
The endless hypocrisy of your society,
That breeds like fungus and survives on a diet of life.

See what you've done in me;
The battered shell that should be a woman,
Whose heart has decayed along with faith,
Because someone said so.”

She got grunts in return, and no thanks.
If you're going to talk to rocks,
They might as well not have ears.
So she returned to the dusty road of travel.

But she left the baggage behind.
:iconkaleidopsyche:

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Feeling a bit "J.K."

This is Chugglepuff's [link] fault - for reminding me who I am.

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:iconhorai:
Have you ever considered writing a television script. ?

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:flaguk: Machines were mice and men were lions once upon a time, but now that it's the opposite, it's twice upon a time. - Moondog
:iconkaleidopsyche:
No, because no one has ever considered giving me money for writing one.
Or anything else for that matter.
(Cheques to myself do not count as 'writing for money', nor do letters to the folks saying; "Dear Folks, please give me money."

It's the getting published part that's tricky. Although if you peruse the selections available at bookstores everywhere today you'd think otherwise.

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Always assume the worst: if it happens you'll be prepared and if it doesn't the surprise will be pleasant.
:iconhorai:
I understand but have you ever tried. I also agree about some of the works published. I have read....well worked my way through a few chapters of some real dross over the years.

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:flaguk: Machines were mice and men were lions once upon a time, but now that it's the opposite, it's twice upon a time. - Moondog
:iconkaleidopsyche:
I have in fact chased the transition from 'writer' to 'author' and found that the need to eat was more pressing than the need to be published.
If I actually were retired ... but I can't even get that to work. Yet.

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Always assume the worst: if it happens you'll be prepared and if it doesn't the surprise will be pleasant.
:iconhorai:
Fair enough.

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:flaguk: Machines were mice and men were lions once upon a time, but now that it's the opposite, it's twice upon a time. - Moondog
:iconkaleidopsyche:
And yes I have had one or two TV ideas. I've known people in the industry, but always the wrong department!

C'est la vie!

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Always assume the worst: if it happens you'll be prepared and if it doesn't the surprise will be pleasant.
:iconchugglepuff:
I really like this. A lot. There's just one word I'm not sure about - "evil" in "like evil fungus"; I think the negative connotations of "fungus" are enough. :shrug: Other than that, I think this is spot-on. Though I am a little concerned as to my precise role in reminding you who you are, I hope I haven't been spouting too much self-justifying nonsense. ^^; But I love this regardless. The water not being particularly wet made me smile, and the emotion in the woman's speech really stung. And that last line is just right.

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A stitch in time mucks up the space-time continuum.

Clicking this link will give you superpowers*.

*May just be a very sneaky way to make you look at my page. But probably not.
:iconkaleidopsyche:
I'm ambiguous about the 'evil' as well; it is only there because fungus is, for the most part, beneficial. I think I'll remove it because it's the only part that bothers me.
Your role was your adventures in structured poetry; I am an unstructured poet. Kind of ironic, really.
Egotistically, this is one piece I've been able to read over and over and still like.
I'm glad you like it too!:)

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Always assume the worst: if it happens you'll be prepared and if it doesn't the surprise will be pleasant.
:iconchugglepuff:
I guess fungus is a good thing, now you mention it, but I associate it primarily with food that's gone off... Perhaps just because I let food go off so frequently...

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A stitch in time mucks up the space-time continuum.

Clicking this link will give you superpowers*.

*May just be a very sneaky way to make you look at my page. But probably not.

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